u can hear the waves build up force and then suddenly crash along the shoreline and sweep across the sand. children try to escape the waves as if the wave was a boat about to collide with the children. you can hear the sound of a child crying and cant make out her words and the crying turns into giggling. silence... the children have stopped playing and the waves have stopped forming until you can hear the distant waves pick up again, then the children let out a playful yell and run away from the waves. by the sounds of those children i can tell there happier than a surfer at the beach. you can hear the trampling of feet as the waves get closer and closer to shore. and when the wave slowly drifts back out to see, the children follow the flowing water back to sea, awaiting the next adventure
1. I liked the the fact that Drew described how the waves come in and out of shore. He told me what happened when the waves came in and what happened to the children when the wave came in. Drew described the boat in the background. He also showed what happened after the wave went back in.
ReplyDelete2.Drew described the sound as waves coming in and out on the beach. And playful children running around on the beach. Also he described boat in the background.
3.Drew should add more descriptive and powerful words in it. Also he should of included on what he though of it. And he should of add to the description by describing what the waves did.